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HOW WILL I KNOW LOVE

THIS IS THE ONE I HAVE TROUBLE WITH,

TO SAY I NEVER LOVED WOULD BE A FALSE STATEMENT,

LOVED BUT NEVER "N" LOVE U SEE,

ALL PRAISES FOR THOSE WHO HAS LEFT ME,, THANK GOD YOU DID,

BECAUSE YOU SEE, NONE OF YOU TRULY BELIEVED "N" LOVE LIKE ME.

HELL, I DID NOT BELIEVE IN THEE.

HOW WILL I KNOW LOVE?

WELL THAT JUST ELUDES ME...

THEN AGAIN, HOW WILL I KNOW LOVE?

THAT'S EASY, IT STARTS BY LOVING ME,

EVERY INCH, PART AND POSITIVE ASPECT OF ME,

SURRENDING TO NO MORE NEGATIVITY.

I MEAN NO SELF HATE OR SELF DOUBT, JUST POSTIVE THOUGHTS OF MYSELF,

NOW THAT'S WHAT I'M ABOUT,

NOW FOR ME LOVING MYSELF COMPLETELY,

IS HOW I WILL KNOW LOVE IMMENSELY. PEACE

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NeColeB74

STARTED WITH A PEN AND A

STARTED WITH A PEN AND A PIECE OF NAPKIN PAPER IN 1996 WHILE WORKING AT PIZZA HUT. STOP WORKING ON IT UNTIL NOW, FINALLY COMPLETE IN 2011
NeColeB74

STILL A WORK IN

STILL A WORK IN PROGRESS...NOT MY FAVORITE PIECE...NEED FEEDBACK? CONTRUCTIVE CRITICISM? SOME HELP PLEASE!!!
drskillzz

Ne'Cole, it's a nice piece,

Ne'Cole, it's a nice piece, and your core message of loving self is spot on. As for constructive criticism: try to avoid typing everything in ALL CAPS. It's a bit jarring on the eyes and difficult to read for many of us. Otherwise, keep at it.
FireHibiscus

Hi Ne'Cole, like drskillz has

Hi Ne'Cole, like drskillz has already said - your message and development of theme is sound. My question to you is: have you ever tried writing in form? Take the piece you have now and read it aloud while marking with a dash thoughts or words that you want to stress. After you're done, break the block paragraph up by placing those stronger words at the ends of each new line. See if you like how it looks and reads then! :-)
FireHibiscus

Looks good! :)

Looks good! :)
NeColeB74

SORRY, FOR ALL CAPS. I HAVE

SORRY, FOR ALL CAPS. I HAVE AN PSUEDO TUMOR CEREBLI. MY CONDITION HAS IMPROVED. I HAVE SEVERAL UPCOMING DOCTOR APPOINTMENTS. ESTIMATED TIME OF RETURNING IS UNDETERMINED FOR NOW.
drskillzz

I wish you well NeCole.

I wish you well NeCole.